When your life is on hold…

We all experience this at some time. When your life is on hold.

  •  Perhaps because of illness – yours or some one else’s. 
  • Or you are awaiting the birth of a baby. 
  • Experiencing both excitement, fear , anxiety  and hope. Such difficult times to go through.

This week I felt for two loved ones struggling while their lives are on hold. They are unable to do anything about it. Knowing that to move on requires some one else to enter their lives. 

 Its difficult when you are tired from too many years of work, and can’t see any way of ending it. When your body is no longer giving you the energy you had previously. As you are almost seventy years of age. And your wife not far behind you.

The only way ahead  is for someone else to respond to their own lives also being on hold in some way.

This  situation is about waiting for a buyer to purchase their Motel Business.

Bream Lodge.

A Fishermans paradise. A business opportunity

It’s a great business. In a great area. Profitable.

  • Offering a location for fishing  groups and families, schools, church, scouting and elderly groups to stay. 
  • With land on which to play a game of cricket. A playground and games room to entertain in.
  • Where boaties explore the beautiful location of the Gippsland Lakes and Rivers.
  • As the Twin Rivers Bream Classic Fishing Competition is an annual attraction to Bream Lodge.

  • Another location advantage
  • Where schools and Olympic Rowers come to train, being accommodated in new, purpose built bunk houses.  
  • Where BBQ’s and open fires entertain. 
  • Where hire boats await the guests.
  • And where a purpose built group camp kitchen and entertainment building entertains and relaxes.
  • Great fully equipped bunkrooms
  • After which guests return to their cosy, warm, quiet self contained motel to rest. 

The important thing I discovered when visiting this Lodge, was that the asking price is affordable. 

Most suitable for families or couples who want a change in direction. Providing a home with an income for less than a home costs in the large cities of Australia and New Zealand.

I imagine it will suit those desiring to leave the rush and expense of big city living. Choosing a rural, river lifestyle, close to Lakes Entrance. Where larger towns of Bairnsdale and Sale provide whatever Lakes doesn’t. Situated on the Princes Highway – what position is better?

And yes, there are good schools close by. 

The new Motel owner will enjoy sending their guests to delightful bays such as Metung and Nungurner. 

Close to beautiful locations

And the newly completed jetty made for the rowers and boaties, at Johnsonville is close enough to walk to. 

Plus, the added value – Opportunities for expansion await a purchaser. Caravan park and swimming pool possibilities.

On the Motel boundary horses feed in the paddocks. 

As I write this blog, the possibilities seem endless for the right buyer. 

Providing an opportunity for a great lifestyle as it has been for the present elderly owners many years ago.

May those reading this blog, please pass this on to family and friends who also are at that place. 

  • Where the change of life style is over due. 
  • A dream is to solve the 70 percent price hike in house purchases currently in Sydney. 
  • Affordability is the key to the attractiveness of this business opportunity.

If interested click on: http://www.breamlodge.com 

 – where the following page will open to you.  Thank you

The video for The Fortune Seekers has been launched 

The video for my book has been launched.
You may view my video at the link below.
YouTube: https://youtu.be/tGmaalu4RHc 
This is a recent review from Germany. An honest and encouraging appraisal. Thank you Andrew Griffith

It was hard going at the beginning, to be brutally honest. The Calvinist upbringing of the two brothers was mentioned a bit too often and I sometimes felt that their language was not consistent with their ages. Adult thoughts in a child’s head, if you know what I mean.

But I gradually got drawn into the story and by the time the boys had their seminal experience in the pub where Dave got laid and Dan got drugged, I was hooked.

I enjoyed the rest of the book. 

Some highlights: I loved your cameo appearance, ghosting through that Welsh graveyard! The descriptions of Dan’s life at sea and the gold mining section were quite convincing, obviously well researched. And, I have to admit, I shed a tear when Dan took Charlotte to the registry office to legalize their marriage.

In a nutshell. the book got better and better as time went on and I am sure your next work will be brilliant from the first page. Keep on writing!

The Fortune Seekers – Dan and Charlotte is available:below from three websites. In hard or soft cover and as an ebook. See below for ordering information.

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The cover of The Fortune Seekers, released August 2016

Carcoar  NSW Australia – delightful town, authentic homes in 2016

Dressed in white…how did they keep their dresses white and clean?
Bottles and glasses, medicines and potions
 


The original Gundagai bridge today 2016  – The 1850 flood destroyed the town. Read of Charlotte’s experience in the remains of the old town in The Fortune Seekers.

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Enjoy.   Glennis Browne 

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Hidden Emotions: How To Tell Readers What Characters Don’t Want To Show
Posted on July 7, 2014 by Angela Ackerman
pensiveOne of the struggles that comes with writing is when a character feels vulnerable and so tries to hide their emotions as a result. Fear of emotional pain, a lack of trust in others, instinct, or protecting one’s reputation are all reasons he or she might repress what’s going on inside them. After all, people do this in real life, and so it makes sense that our characters will too. Protecting oneself from feeling exposed is as normal as it gets.

But where does that leave writers who STILL have to show these hidden emotions to the reader (and possibly other characters in the scene)?

The answer is a “TELL”– a subtle, bodily response or micro gesture that a character has little or no control over.

No matter how hard we try, our bodies are emotional mirrors, and can give our true feelings away. We can force hands to unknot, fake nonchalance, smile when we don’t mean it and lie as needed. However, to the trained eye, TELLS will leak through: a rushed voice. An off-pitch laugh. Hands that fiddle and smooth. Self-soothing touches to comfort. Sweating.

Tip from Colin the Ipad man- Record Videos horizontally on iPhones

Today I am posting a helpful tip from my friend and ipad/iPhone tutor- Colin Dunkerley. 

Hoping this tip will remind you as it has reminded me, how to successfully use our phones to video. It makes great sense.

Thanks Colin.
Record video horizontally!

Those of you that have attended my group course would have heard me go on about recording your videos horizontally. It still amazes me how many people film their children and grand-children in portrait mode.
You don’t have to look far for evidence of this, just watch the nightly news. Just about everytime the TV news uses footage from someone’s mobile phone it is in portrait mode and almost looks like you are watching through a door crack.

Please when making a video from your iPhone hold the iPhone (or iPad) horizontally! 

Remember – Record Video Horizontally 

I would like to once again thank you on behalf of Tianne, Darrin & myself for the wonderful support you have given our business. We couldn’t be happier helping you achieve more with your iPads & iPhones. 

Please remember that you are NEVER bothering us and that we are here to help so please call 07 5444 5338 during business hours or email support@ipadlessons.com.au whenever you need help. We are here for you!

Until we see you again.

Warm wishes from

Colin Dunkerley – The iPad Man, Tianne & Darrin.

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Time Markers, by Mary Carroll Moore

Once again I am posting tips from Mary Carroll Moores’s weekly blog.  This week, the article attracting my attention is:- Time Markers: How to Keep a Reader on Track with Your Story.  

A few months ago, I began exchanging chapters with a writer who has an incredible skill with something called “time markers.” I feel very lucky to have her reading my chapters with time in mind. She has caught my natural sloppiness the way a good editor might, saving me and my reader from going off track and losing the story thread.

Are you aware of time markers in your story? They’re vital in fiction and memoir, even in nonfiction. They’re the little mentions of where we are in place, time of day, day of the week, even season, so that readers slide effortlessly through the sequence of events.

Many professional writers use timeline charts as part of their storyboarding or outlining process. They take each person in the story, for instance, and write a timeline of their events in sequence. What time of year it happens (season), then what day, then what time of day. It seems nit-picky when you’re in early drafts, and I don’t usually pay much attention at that stage, but in later revision it’s essential.  

A timeline chart might be as simple as the character’s name, the scene, and three columns for (1) season, (2) day of the week, and (3) time of day. If events are hourly in your book, if they are even day after day, your total timeline might span a week or a month or a year. But if you are covering huge swatches of time, you’ll really need this kind of time marking for yourself, so you know if three years have passed or a decade.

Once you have your timeline chart in place, there’s a great sense of relief. At least for me. But then, as we write, we often lose track of the chart and move time all over the place. A scene starts out in daylight then suddenly there’s a point where something is discovered by flashlight. Unless there’s a time marker, showing that we’ve moved into nighttime, the reader will stop, possibly go back and reread (never a good thing), or put down the book altogether.

I know this happens to me a lot. I have my timeline chart but as I move into later drafts, I ignore it. Hence, the need for readers to catch this–if I can’t do it myself.

Time markers can be obvious or subtle. 

 Obvious time markers might be “Three days had passed with no word from Ella” or “Had it only been yesterday?” Clunky when you’re writing them, but an instant relief for your reader. Now we know if the previous chapter happened two days or a week ago.
Subtler time markers – include a sense of changing light in a room or space, the beginning of darkness outside and need for man-made light, how a person is dressed (which can show time of day or season), sleep and waking moments, and much more.

Stuff like this is tedious to keep track of. Most writers dislike it and ignore it. But nothing stumbles a reader faster.  

Your writing exercise this week is to either try the timeline chart for one of your characters or scan 3-4 chapters or scenes to get acquainted with how you are using time in your story.  

My comment: 

I am looking through The Fortune Seekers, with an eye on looking for time markers. Hopefully I’ll discover enough to help my readers know where and what is happening. Without burdening and boring them with too much  description. 

Until next time, Glennis

How to Crisp Up Your Writing–Revision Tools for Wordsmithing

Once again I am reblogging one of Mary Carroll Moores’s writing tips. 

For over a year she has reminded me or taught me a lot  about writing. Mary and the AutoCrit Programme have been my teachers in the writing of The Fortune Seekers.

 Today’s article is on crisp writing – something quite new to me a year ago. Perhaps my readers may also benefit from this refresher.

 How to Crisp Up Your Writing–Revision Tools for Wordsmithing. By- 

(Quoted by Mary)

I’m a lifelong learner–there’s always so much new stuff to practice and absorb about making great books. I take different online classes for accountability and to keep up with new writing ideas.  

This summer, I took two classes on revision.  

We posted our writing for feedback. Writers were experienced and got mostly positive comments, but occasionally we’d see this: “I love your writing but can you make it a little crisper?”

Crisp writing. What is that? 

 Tight, toned, well paced, fairly bouncing off the page. Stands out to a reader, an agent, an editor.  

Easier said than written, I think!  

Crisp doesn’t usually appear in early drafts (if it does, you might be holding back too much, wordsmithing too soon!). Early drafts are about content and structure, exploring what you want the writing to say, what flow you’re after. It takes a while to get these two aspects solid. In books, even longer. I find about 80 percent of total time with a book, from idea to publication, is spent on content and structure. So if you’re still there, don’t worry too much. Take your time–you need to get this part right before you begin to work on tightening the prose. Otherwise you’ll have beautiful sentences that mean nothing.

But once you’re ready to crisp it up, here are some global searches that help me a lot:

1. Search for “was” and “were” and “are”–any form of the verb “to be.” E.B. White who coauthored the famous book The Elements of Style, talks about this being a blah verb, one that doesn’t provoke imagery or excitement in a reader. It’s true–and when you do a search for “was,” and begin to see how often you use it (was staring instead of stared, for instance), you’ll be stunned. Replace with more direct, active, vivid verbs.

2. Then search for “-ing.” Again, this form of the verb denotes progressive movement, rather than anything sharp and decisive. You’ll need it sometimes, but writers use it a LOT more than they should, IMHO. Replace where you can.

3. Look for repetitive sentence patterns. My unconscious pattern is groups of three actions in one sentence (they sat, ate, then left). Find yours–easier with feedback from a close reader. Then vary, vary, vary!

4. Watch out for your use of sentence fragments. These are great little punches every now and then but like any device, they can be overused.  

5. Cut some of that imagery, especially as “stage set” at the opening of a chapter or scene. Do you need to set the stage? Can you just jump right into action?

6. Search for “-ly” words, the dreaded adverb which Stephen King rails against in his writing-craft book On Writing. Delete whenever possible.  

7. Search for “suddenly,” “finally,” and “at last”–these can create melodrama, so be sure you need them when you use them. I’m guilty of three to four “suddenly’s” in one page!

There are more, but this should give you a good start.

Thank you once again Mary for your valuable tips.

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Using Pause Breaks to Strengthen the Pacing of Your Story 

Using Pause Breaks to Strengthen the Pacing of Your Story , by Mary Carroll Moore 

Right now, I’m working with a writer who is studying pacing: specifically, how to pace her chapters. She tends to deliver too much–too many images, too many ideas, too much happening–all at once. It feels like a freight train coming at the reader.

So we’re studying the writerly device of pause breaks.
Very simply: in any genre of book, readers need time to absorb stuff. They hate not keeping up. They will vote by putting the book down, in all likelihood, if they get confused by too much coming at them. You’re not there to urge them to pick the book up again–“It gets really good in a couple pages!”–so as a writer you have to anticipate this. By putting in those pause breaks.

In fiction and memoir, these are reflective scenes. The narrator (main character) might take time to think about something, reflect on it. And the reader can do the same. If you’re writing a novel, memoir, biography, or other narrative story, you can use reflective scenes as your pause break.
Nonfiction has three devices to create pause breaks:

1. Story (illustrative anecdote)

2. Exercise or practical application

3. Visual change (sidebar, box, different font, cartoon, etc.)
In a chapter, consider the main event–action or idea–and ask whether you’ve incorporated any pause break. Maybe not in every chapter, especially in a fast-paced story, but soon enough that the reader can take a breath.  

If you have too many pause breaks, there’s a sense of stall-out. That’s something to watch for, as well.
This Week’s Writing Exercise

Look over two or three chapters in your current manuscript–they can be rough or polished–and ask yourself where you’ve placed reflective scenes or another device that gives the reader a pause to absorb what’s been delivered, what’s just happened. Do you need to re-flow any part of your chapter to allow for this?