I liked how you showed how Les’ actions affect the children, as well as Arthur’s kind protectiveness – this in particular was very good as it echoed his experience in his father’s treatment of his mother, and perhaps his own subconscious desire to put things right through his choice and treatment of partner – great.
Another editing tip from Jordan
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New Zealand author, blogging and researcheing family trees. I write fiction ally about historical families, focusing on the challenges, social issues and indiscretions that caused major disruptions in ancestors lives. My aim is to create realistic reality by bringing greater understanding to our generation. Follow The Fortune Seekers Series of novels- Dan and Charlotte and Power and Authority. Books 3 and 4 underway. I also write as Annie Browne. View more posts